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"He who hesitates is lost"....No, I'm not that clever. It was actually from a Lemony Snicket book, so no, if you're going to praise someone for that, it would be Captain Widdershins. (Aye!)
But you put it in the story, in a way that made me imagine Bashir's facial expression - what, in my opinion made it extremely funny.
Okay, I have a headache now. I always get one when time travelling stuff is involved.

But like it.
To be honest, I'm not a fan of the "Bashir gets Dax, gets married and the two of them have lots of children". But that's a quite personal opinion and since the epilogue is not really connected to the story I would say your story is quite entertaining. (Good bedtime reading. - I dreamed of turtles that night - don't ask why, I don't know.

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Ulli